Talk:Stella Nox Lucis Illuminati

Grammar
This is a good page, but as I was reading through it, I noticed some of the grammar was incorrect. Would the creator of the page (User:The6thMessenger) would mind if I did some revisions? MitsuSaire00 20:39, March 16, 2012 (UTC)

Can you show your revisions first, and the changes made? Also unlike most pages here, i'm sorry to say that is NOT thoroughly made, most aspect of my character is thought out really carefuly, mainly because it's for story telling purposes, and i still can't make her sing for i don't speak or create lyrics in nihongo. But aside everything, thank you. The6thMessenger 00:57, March 23, 2012 (UTC)

No problem, I'll use the sandbox. I promise I WILL NOT change any concepts on the page, I just want to make it easier for English-speaking users to understand (I'm not saying it's impossible to understand, just that I have to read some things 2 or 3 times). I can probably start doing revisions sometime next week or the week after. MitsuSaire00 14:57, March 25, 2012 (UTC)

I completed the revisions today. I tried not to change the order of objects but some things had to change in order for them to sound right when read. The other thing I did, aside from correcting the English, was that I added Stella's name to page so that it appeared more often. I noticed that it didn't seem to appear very much at the beginning of the article. I didn't change any of the concepts of the page, even though I rephrased some items. Please let me know whether or not the revisions are OK with you. If not, feel free to revert them. Hope you like it! MitsuSaire00 20:25, April 2, 2012 (UTC)

Almost everything is great, i didn't even saw the wrongly spelled words until it was shown in the wiki's compare feature. But i modified the section about Len. You see, if you say : "If they even have one", that would mean that such action would have been done IF they have one, answering the "What would she do" invisible question proposed by the "If they even have one", but nevertheless saying that they NEVER had a conversation before, thus the logic of the storyline would have been wrong because that "if they even have one" condition was established because they had a conversation but the "if they even have one" states that they never did have one but that would have happened instead if such event occurs. Saying "If they would ever have one" would pertain that it's the predetermined action if such event occurs.

I thank Visual Basic, Warcraft 3 Editor and my Philosophy professor, for because of them, i understand logical flow of sentences clearer.

The6thMessenger 17:44, April 14, 2012 (UTC)